Pokemon Hoenn XDA

[Flaming Quilava]

Hey heres my comic! I hope you like it! btw this is my first comic. I hope you have a fun time reading it!
~Rules~
1. Dont spam.
2.Follow the main rules.

There are 8 opened spots on this comic! If you have any ideas pm me!

Ok and here are the eposodes. I will fix the grammer in the first one later. Plz rate it!

Intruduction:http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Polt.png

Sesion 1:The biggining

Comic1 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/X_Comic_X_1.png
Comic2 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA.png
Comic3 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA3.png
Comic4 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA4.png
Comic5 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA5.png
Comic6 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA6.png
Comic7 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA7.png
Comic8 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA8.png
Comic9 http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/Pokemon_Hoenn_XDA9.png
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Bois

Name: Philip Speed
Genger:Male
Age:12-13
Hometown: A private island
Nature:Brave
Bio: Philip is a kid who would give up being inside somewhere for a chance to go outside. He went on a journey to get some fresh air and adventure.
Trainer Card: http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c326/Dragon_man_/TCXD1.png

Name: David Casprin
Genger:Male
Age:13
Hometown:Littleroot town
Nature: Timed
Bio: David was born in a rich family. He went on a journey to prove to his family that he doesnt need money to be sucsesful kid.
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Cradits:
Rad hair guy:kenada morspeed.
Island place {biggining}:[ DarkDragon ]
Most of the overworlds: Avatar
Template for tc's: Bhreg
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[Kaneda Morspeed]

Umm... Did I say you could use my Overworld in that way? NO! I demand an explanation, and that you take out those episodes, or at least find another Overworld.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

I said if i can change the name and occupation tho

 

[Kaneda Morspeed]

No, I meant that you change the name from that back to the original.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Nah i rather get a new overworld.

 

[Signomi]

Please remember to give credit to people you borrow any kind of sprite from, otherwise it's considered stealing. Some spriters would prefer it if you PM them for their permission to use their sprites in your comic, in which I'd recommend doing. Always give credit to the spriters whom you borrow their sprites from. Remember that before you use a sprite from somewhere else in the future~ :)

Also, kindly please give credit to Avatar for most of those overworld sprites, as he was the person who made them~ :)

Well, keep at it with your comic! ;)

 

[Roy-Kun]

Where's the credit for the sprites? o.o

Also, i don't understand the history, try adding a plot, then Bios, that would make it understand.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

O i added the credit. Ill add the plot later. Where do i get the pictures for bois O.O?

Edit: Done with the plot.

 

[Matt Silver]

I like this comic a bit. The battles are ok and the panels are good sized.
There is a lot of spelling mistakes which I HATE!
But all in all keep at it. Just.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Thanks matt. And i know that i misspell alot. Im trying not to do that anymore.:D

 

[Shijuukara]

Ok, its a good comic but you need to work on it a bit.

1. I can barely understand what's going on. Its kind of rushing
2. A lot of spelling and grammar errors
3. Where the plot of the story
4. Where are the bios and introducing the characters
5. Try to put each screen closer together and then crop it.
6. If you are going to use speech bubbles you need to work on them a bit try using a box at the bottom just until you can make better Speech Bubbles.

I'm sure this'll be a great comic if yuo can tidy it up more a bit.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

I put the plot in the biggining. The "intruduction" Also thanks for the suggestions!

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Woot Update comic 4 is up!!

 

[Matt Silver]

Yeah the new comic is kinda rushing ahead and there are too many panels. Keep going thoguh.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

O ok i made this one with less panels. Comic 5 is up!!
EDIT: Comic 6 is up!!!

 

[Karasu]

The comic's ok, but there's alot of spelling errors and you should try to do battle scenes like in the games.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Ok i will update soon!!!!:D :D :D :D :D

 

[Matt Silver]

Season is spelt wrong. Anyway, nice, shorter update.

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Woot Update!! Comic 7 is up!! Ill update the bio for david later.
Edit: Bois added!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[Flaming Quilava]

Woot comic 8 is up!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Post your suggetions!!!!!!!!!!!!:D :D :D :D :D :D :D