Recent content by Obsidian Blade

Chapter I Violet eyes snapping open, Shaaca lurched into a crouch, her whole body shaking as she took huge, gasping breaths. In the dry light of late morning she glanced around warily, trying to get her bearings in the enervating wake of her nightmare. She was in a cave. Her cave, she realised...

Although I liked your opening paragraph and the third one down in particular, specifically your phrasing when you write of how the rust "did little to hinder him" and the corrosive saliva leaking through "as he hungered", I found the action in this prologue difficult to follow due to the way in...

PLAGUE The Omastar and the Kabutops tribes have always been at odds, so when a fatal disease decimates the Kabu population they know who to blame. A small group is sent out to verify this accusation but the prehistoric Pokémon world is a harsh place to be, especially when their sight is...

I only had time to read chapter one, but overall I enjoyed it. I agree with Skunter about paragraphing, mind – while double spacing looks awkward in your word document, indentation doesn't work on most forums so paragraphing your piece as though it were a book just doesn't work, annoyingly...

Although I liked your description of the guy coming to the door, giving him a Deoxys and putting the word 00ber into a fic was not a good idea. Keep that sort of terminology (00ber, I mean) out of fiction. HP is alright so long as you don't start quoting it in battles, although some people may...

I call it Annoying Random Number Syndrome. Fanfiction.net did that whole "we cannot have two authors with the same Pen Name" thing a while back so they stuck random numbers onto names... As a result, I've found that sometimes the search fails if you miss out the stooopid number. >< And here is...

Lots of prologues are kept short because they are the part that hooks any new readers in. As people are more likely to read a short fiction under the thought that it won't take too long to read, more people take a look and more people are hooked. So it does make sense. ^^ Anyway, about the...

*blinkeh* Wow, many many many thanks, SilverBlaze, JA and Lily. Obbeh feels special. ^^ *huggles Twisted Hierarchy and hands out random items of confectionary to reviewers* 'Tis odd, the way my one-shots do so well. Especially since I never really plan them out: this one was going to be Just...

I'm back, not dead, with a one-shot that did okay everywhere else. Haven't done any reviewing yet, but I will... soon. I'm just feeling so desperately ill at the moment that any review I tap out will be awful. So I won't even try until I feel better. ><

Okay, excuse the first terrible sentence or two (the parts in italics) because that was the prompt I had to go from for this to be entered in a contest on TPT. *holds up hands in mock surrender* They ain't my words. Twisted Hierarchy The big day has come- it's time to battle the hardest...

Chapter III Part I Ah hah, you thought I was dead, but nay! I neva die! Buwahahahahaha! >< Raven: Emerald Fist Mechyena Saga Chapter III: Sugoi! I lay on my back, sprawled across the wrinkled sheets of one of the Pok?mon centre?s beds as I stared at the pale plaster of the ceiling. It was...

I'm on a roll, which is a nice change. ^^ This chapter was hard to write, but I'm happy with the final product. Enjoy! Just a Girl Chapter One: Disorientation The sun shone down in all its pre-dusk glory, its light glittering on the wet sands of a forgotten beach on the southern coast of...

*struggles not to faint* Fic of the week already... and a review from frosty... and inspiration to go back and edit that start of chapter two... Well, I'll post the last part of c2 now while I work on the other part. Chapter II: Gingerbread - Part II Three hours later found me trudging...

Confusing? Really? *looks back at all the reviews she gave on SPPf* O.o; I wish somebody had told me sooner. I think... I need more material before I can make a final decision. Like I said (if I wasn't too confusing then), the first paragraph was very... odd. But I like the idea of Oak...

That's a good point - to be honest, when I was reading it through for the second time to pick out the parts I wanted to criticise my mind had been so numbed by the structural errors that it hadn't even occurred to me that some of it might be on purpose. <<; I understand what you mean, although...